Chapter+18

Amelia crept back through the hallway, attempting not to alert any spirits. She came to a room where she the voices of hundreds of spirits. She peeked in and found that Jamie was in the centre, surrounded by all of them. They were shouting at him, demanding him to tell them where their ancestor was. ‘’Our ancestor!’’ Amelia thought, ‘’She was meant to distract the spirits so that we could escape. I wonder what happened to her!’’ Suddenly, she heard a large bang outside and the floor rumbled. The spirits inside the room dropped Jamie and flew straight outside the window towards the source of the explosion.

‘’Jamie!’’ Amelia yelled, ‘’Are you alright?’’ ‘’I’m fine.’’ Jamie coughed and slowly climbed to his feet. ‘’Our ancestor must have caused that explosion to draw away the spirits.’’ ‘’Really...’’ Amelia replied, ‘’She gave her life for us?’’ ‘’I guess so. Lets get going before they come back.’’ Amelia and Jamie carried along the hallway and back towards the book. ‘’I think this must be the power.’’ Amelia said. Jamie walked forward and cautiously picked up the magical book, its pages still mysteriously turning. Dust flew off the ancient pages as it was lifted off the ground. The writing on it was not in English, instead it had some sort of strange symbols. For a few moments, they admired the book until Amelia said, ‘’We’d better start heading towards the crack.’’ Amelia and Jamie grudgingly walking over to the door and went outside. Star- You have used great descriptive language Star- You have included great detail which makes you draw the reader in  Wish- You have said that Jamie goes outside but then he is suddenly back inside (edit it to make it make sense). Abigail Mason