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As Amelia stood looking at Jamie she thought to herself will I be next, then suddenly she remembered she gave a page of the book to Jamie. For a split second she realised this could be why the spirits have come back and the importance of making sure they don't get it became clear. Amelia ran over to Jamie in desperation and bent down beside him she took the page from him and told him to stay there while she distracted the spirits. Jamie remained on the floor as Amelia showed the page of the book to the spirits and ran with very little energy. The spirits chased her and were getting closer and closer she panicked but knew if they caught her things would be a lot worse. She got back to one of the schools and ran up and down the corridors she tried all the door handles but none were unlocked. She got to the end of the final corridor and suddenly she realised that if the last door didn't open she was in big trouble. She tried the door handle and it burst open luckily the key was still in the lock she grabbed it and closed the door locking it behind her.

She could hear the spirits, some were going past the window outside. As the spirits passed the door she knew if she was going to break free and see Jamie again she was going to have to make a run for it. She folded the page of the book and stuffed it down her sock. The corridor went silent and she knew now was the time. she made her way to the door and slowly unlocked it, The door creaked as she opened it so she took her time. Once free she peered round the corners to make sure they were clear they seemed to be fine so she made her way slowly the only noise to be heard was Amelia's footsteps and heavy breathing. The noise of footsteps became louder she stopped walking to see if there was someone else there with her. The footsteps continued, Amelia became very scared her heart started beating faster and faster she began to run and the footsteps got louder, she hid round a corner and as she went to check if the coast was clear a hand touched her shoulder she screamed and another hand covered her mouth!! She looked round it was Jamie............

Improvements Good discribing words and over all a great chapter.
 * Try to use some more commas, full stops and capital letters, so that it is easier to read (check the first sentence of the second paragraph).