Chapter+6

=**Chapter 6**=

She was still giving it her all to run but after a while, the run had turned into a jog and the jog had turned into a walk. The spirits were gaining on her very fast now. Soon the spirits were only a few meters away and she realised that when a loud voice was shouting in her ear, it said "give us it, now!". Amelia thought to herself "what do they want?". She looked behind her and saw the spirits a few yards away now. She quickly closed her eyes and stopped running for a few seconds, it all went quiet so she opened her eyes again. The spirits weren't behind her, she looked around and saw all of them running towards Jamie. She quickly shouted "what is it that you want?". All of the spirits turned around and started walking towards Amelia, they said "its your Ancesters, they have taken the the power from us and we want it back". "But why do you think we have it and where is everyone in Banchory gone". We have put all of them in a secret place until we get our power back. The spirits kept on walking closer to Amelia and Amelia kept on walking back, her leg had slackened off now and it felt a lot better and easier to run on. Amelia started to think where is Jamie and just as she thought it, Jamie shouting "Amelia, Amelia come over to me, I am at the Graveyard!". Amelia quickly turned and ran, the spirit were just behind her but Amelia was picking up more and more pace as it went on.

She could now see Jamie in the distance, he was beside their Grandads grave getting his breath back. Amelia screamed "Jamie run they are gaining on us". Jamie quickly turned and looked at Amelia then he shouted "watch out they are right behind you" and then they cot her and surrounded her. All Jamie heard was "Jamie, Help". Jamie and Amelia wandered and wandered what to do as they ran but they couldn't think of anything except hide or run but they couldn't think of anywhere to hide atthe moment so they had no choice, run.....

Constructive Critism:
 * very good writing, but we've already had them running around quite a lot, so perhaps you could add in a bit about them wondering what to do

! try and proof read your work because there was 1 or 2 little mistakes
[ joss ]