Chapter+27

Mirran's chapter

The ancestor started to run to the book but one of the spirits noticed the ancestor running to the book, so the spirit picked up the book and went away but the ancestor followed the spirit but the spirit turned around and saw the ancestor, the spirit made a loud screeching sound. All the other spirits saw the ancestor trying to take the book so they all ran towards the ancestor making a huge loud noise like there were about a thousand screaming girl's running towards the ancetsor. The ancestor ran passed Jamie and Amelia, so the ancetsor passed the book to him so he started to run and so did Amelia, every time one of them ran passed the one that has the book, they would pass the book to each other, when Jamie tried to throw the book to the ancestor one of the spirits went in front of the ancestor and ran away with it.The ancestor ran behind the spirit and then caught up with the spirit and got the book and then passed the book to Amelia, then she asked Jamie for the page so she could put the page inside the book. Amelia throw the book to the ancestor but Amelia didn't see were she was going, so she fell into the crack but she was hanging onto the edge, Jamie heard his sister shouting for help, so he went to help but the ancestor already had helped her. Jamie saw Amelia laying on the ground so he went to go and see her ,he said to her "are you okay". Amelia said "I think I've broken my leg ". Jamie started to carry Amelia to a safe place but the ancestor still was trying to get the book from the spirit. The spirit drop the book so the ancestor got the book, the ancestor went to the crack was just away to jump, Jamie shouted "NO"!........

Very good Mirran, you've started bringing the story to an end really well You could use him or her instead of Amelia or Jamie somtimes and you don't need to repeat the sentance again and again but it was very well written. Well done!

good ideas good description try to make your sentances make sense (Ewan Stewart)