Chapter+21

Jamie and Amelia both staggered back towards the crack..Jamie's back still in pain from earlier, and Amelia still hurting from her many falls. They both still had high hopes to get the book back, but they had no energy, they hadn't slept for days and their food and water supplies were low, very low. They finally got to the crack, it was deserted.. there was no sign of movement. Amelia and Jamie jumped back in scare as they heard a massive 'BOOM', unsure of which direction it had come from. Everything was quite for many moments, until Amelia screamed, Jamie soon understood why she had done so. Jamie turned around and saw exactly what Amelia could see through her wet eyes - she just wanted this all to be over. Jamie and Amelia were out-numbered, all the spirits were lined up, as if they were signalling for a war. Jamie had had enough. "LEAVE US ALONE" he screamed, his throat was dry and also in excruciating pain. But what Amelia couldn't understand was why the spirits had come back to them if they already got the book back, until the spirits screamed back to them in reply, "YOU STOLE IT, I THOUGHT YOU 'NEVER HAD THE BOOK' AND 'YOU DIDNT KNOW WHAT WE WERE ON ABOUT'!? HU?". So much confusion was spilling through ALL of their heads. The spirits suddenly took charge, coming towards the exhausted brother and sister, they were picking on Jamie this time.. in one push, Jamie was sprawled on the floor, unable to get up, he was thrown against the wall and had hit his head. The spirits weren't done yet, they were just beginning....

Star- You used good word choises Star- Good suspense was used, it creates good impact. Wish- Maybe use a bit more speech. But very good!

** They Came Back.. **

J amie and Amelia both staggered back towards the crack. Jamie’s back still in pain from earlier, and Amelia still hurting from her many falls. They both still had high hopes to get the book back, but they had no energy, they hadn't slept for days and their food and water supplies were low, very low. They finally got to the crack, it was deserted... There was no sign of movement. Amelia and Jamie jumped back in scare as they heard a massive 'BOOM', unsure of which direction it had come from. Everything was quite for many moments, until Amelia screamed; Jamie soon understood why she had done so. Jamie turned around and saw exactly what Amelia could see through her wet eyes - she just wanted this all to be over. Jamie and Amelia were out-numbered, all the spirits were lined up, as if they were signalling for a war. Jamie had had enough. "LEAVE US ALONE" he screamed, his throat was dry and also in excruciating pain. But what Amelia couldn't understand was why the spirits had come back to them if they already got the book back, until the spirits screamed back to them in reply, "YOU STOLE IT, I THOUGHT YOU 'NEVER HAD THE BOOK' AND 'YOU DIDNT KNOW WHAT WE WERE ON ABOUT'!? HU?” So much confusion was spilling through ALL of their heads. The spirits suddenly took charge, coming towards the exhausted brother and sister, they were picking on Jamie this time.. in one push, Jamie was sprawled on the floor, unable to get up, he was thrown against the wall and had hit his head. The spirits weren't done yet, they were just beginning..