Chapter+20

When Jamie looked into the spirit's eyes he saw anger and pain. For a moment, he felt compassion for the creature. Suddenly he heard a scream. Jamie knew that scream, it was Amelia! Jamie didn't know what or how but he felt a huge adrenaline rush. He immediately jumped up on to his feet and Jamie and noticed a rock just next to him before the spirit wrestled him to the ground. He picked it up, and threw it at the spirit! The rock hit it directly in the forehead. When the bewildered spirit gathered its bearings, Jamie had already sprinted away. He eventually found a small building to hide in for a while. 'I think I've lost them' Jamie thought to himself. then he heard a rustling behind him. Slowly. Carefully Jamie turned around to see what was behind him... it was Amelia! of course she gave him a fright, but boy was he glad to see her. Amelia was so happy to see him she jumped to him and gave him a hug. They were so happy they had forgotten about the book. " The book!" Jamie cried. "Amelia have you got the book?" Jamie asked sternly. Amelia gave him a guilty look and showed him part of the ancient book. " It wasn't my fault! the spirits attacked me when I didn't expect it!" Jamie was obviously not happy about the fact he had just almost died just to get the book lost. " Great!" Jamie shouted. He sat down and put his head in his hands. " We've lost." Jamie whispered.

The siblings, after the problem, had decided to try and find where the spirits are meeting. They first looked around the school areas. There was nothing there. So eventually they tried everywhere except one place. The crack...

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But well done, good chapter! :)
 * When Jamie throws the rock at the spirit, chapter three says it goes right through, but this chapter says it hits him. How?

This chapter is really good, however I think the word Jamie was repeated a lot. You could try using he, as well as other possible words as well. Apart from this and the other improvements that people have wrote, I think this chapter is brilliant. Well done!

The spirit's face was different to the others, it had this odd spiritual mask that looked quite solid to him.When Jamie looked into the spirit's bulging eyes he saw anger and pain. For a moment, he felt compassion for the creature. Suddenly he heard a scream. He knew that scream, it was Amelia! the young lad didn't know where it had came from, but he felt a huge adrenaline rush, pumping through his body. He immediately jumped up on to his feet and had noticed a rock next to him before the spirit wrestled him to the ground. He picked the rock up, and threw it at the spirit! The rock hit the spirit square in the forehead. When the bewildered spirit gathered its bearings, Jamie had already sprinted away. He eventually found a small building to hide in for a while. 'I think I've lost them' he thought to himself. Then there was a rustling behind him. Slowly. Carefully Jamie turned around to see what was behind him... it was Amelia! Of course she gave him a fright, but boy was he glad to see her. Amelia was so happy to see him she jumped to him and gave him a hug. They were so happy they had forgotten about the book. " The book!" Jamie cried. "Amelia have you got the book?" he asked sternly. Amelia gave him a guilty look and showed him part of the ancient book. " It wasn't my fault! The spirits attacked me when I least expected it!" he was obviously not happy about the fact he had just almost died just to get the book lost again. "Great!" Jamie shouted in fury. He sat down and put his head in his hands. "We've lost." Jamie whispered. "We already had." Amelia said in a soothing voice.
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The siblings, after the problem, had decided to try and find where the spirits are meeting. They first looked around the school areas. There was nothing there. They checked the building estates, still nothing there. So eventually they tried everywhere except one place: The crack...